fan fiction scrollSaved, Crushed, Dead

 Atton RandExile (Male/Light Side)Mira

Authors Notes: First off, DO–NOT–MASS–COMMENT STORIES, Nihilus. I appreciate your creative criticism, but too much isn’t nessecary. This is the next part in the Reuntited series. Hope you enjoy it. I STRONGLY suggest that you read Chapter one before this one. The first story is the one before Nihiluses, The Secret. Enjoy! Listening to Black Roses Red, Hey There Delilah, and Tree Hugger. (And no, I’m not a hippie).

Two there should be; no more, no less. One to embody the power; the other to crave it.~Darth Bane, Dark Lord of the Sith.

Mira stiffled up the tears that were falling down her cheeks.

“DAMN YOU ATTON RAND!!!!” she shouted while she stormed out of the restraunt.

Everyone stared.

Mira didn’t care. All she wanted was to get back at Atton.


Bao-Dur was almost dead.

Darth Sybur (Changed it from Nfru, people didn’t like that name) kept Bao-Dur alive, only to bask in his pain.

“KILL ME!!!!”

Darth Sybur just laughed a laugh that would make your blood freeze.

“I know you don’t understand what I’m saying, but I bask in your pain. You weak bastard.” Sybur responded in the language of the Ancient Sith.

Bao-Dur shuddered when he heard the voice.

He tried summoning his cyvan colored saber, but it felt as if the Force was no longer with him.


Atton landed on Nar Shadda.

He ran out and ignored the dock master who shouted, “Aren’t you going to pay for that spot???”

Atton ran into the Refugee Docks.

Then into the Docks.

Then into Jekk`Jekk`Tarr.

He covered his mouth and ran into the toxic room.

Into another.

Into another.

And into another where there was a door.

It didn’t open by command.

Atton didn’t have that much time until he would have to breath again.

He activated his lightsaber and made a hole in the door.

He crawled through it.

In this room he could breath again.

Atton ran to the door that would lead to the Jekk`Jekk`Tarr Tunnels.


There was a knock on the door.

The Exile jumped out of the bed and put the lower part of his robes on, his chest still bare.

He answered.

Mira was standing there sobbing.

“Atton didn’t show up!!!” Mira shouted, walking into the room.

Brianna covered her body with the covers of the bed.

Through the tears Mira saw Brianna cover herself.

“And I disrupted you guys making love!!!!” Mira went on, sobbing even harder.

The Exile looked at Brianna.

He gave her the, WHAT–THE–HELL??? Type of look.

“Mira, slow down, stop crying, and tell us what happened.” the Exile said.

“Well, he stopped me on my way to your guises apartment, when he stopped me and then he asked me if I was still going out with Daran. I said that I was going to break up with Daran. Then he asked me if I wanted to go to Flamed Ice. I said okay. I got dressed in this hot dress,” Mira stopped and asked Brianna, “It is hot, isn’t it?”

“Very much so.”

Mira continued,

“Anyway, then I went to Flamed Ice. He didn’t show up. He didn’t show up for an hour, so I left.”

Mira’s tears slowly started to stop.

“Uh, Mira? Can you close your eyes so I can put my clothes on?”


Mira closed her eyes and Brianna got up to put her robes on.

“You can open them now.”

Mira opened.

Brianna walked over and put her hand on Mira’s shoulder.

“We all know Atton, and we know that he must have a good reason for not coming.”


Atton made it through the maze of the Jekk`Jekk`Tarr Tunnels.

He walked into the center room were there was purple glass for people to observe what was going on in it.

Atton walked into the very center and simply sat down.

The center of the room started moving downwards like an elevator.

Atton kept his eyes closed.

The “Elevator” stopped.

Atton walked away. He heard it go back up.

The room he was in was super dark but lit by a light he couldn’t see.

He walked up to a door that had markings on it.

One squiggled to the right, the other to the left.

Then in big letters:

Nadda’s Core

Atton walked up to it.

He put one hand on the first d in Nadda.

The door opened.

As soon as he opened the door he felt his feet land in something that made a slushy sound.



Mira slowly got up and said good–bye to Brianna and the Exile.

“Where were we?”

He bent forward and kissed her.

Pretty soon both their robes were off.

He was about to go farther when the comlink rang.

He got up with regret.

He switched the comlink on.

Atton was standing there, sobbing and holding Bau-Dor in his hands.

“He-he-he’s dead….”


10 minutes before

Atton walked into the room.

Bau-Dor was laying down with bloud puring out of his chest and the… lower area….


Darth Sybur looked up and glared at Atton, showing Atton his fangs.

Atton activated his duel sabers, one green, one yellow.

Sybur ran at Atton.

Atton was more than prepared.

He sliced the hand off Sybur and stuck his saber into their chest.

Atton walked over to Bau-Dor.


“Atton, you… you got my messege… didn’t you….?” Bau-Dor said, struggling and coughing up blood.

Tears welled up in Atton’s eyes.

“I did. Let me help you.”

Atton tried to put his hand on Bau-Dor’s chest to stop the bleeding, but Bau-Dor stopped him.

“This is how it’s supposed to be….”

“No, it isn’t. You’re supposed to live, don’t you remember Wryi-Hu?”

“Of course I do, how can I forget her?”

“Live, do it for her.”

“No, even if I wanted to, I’ll die.”

Atton started sobbing.

Bau-Dor’s bleeding stopped, so did his breathing.

His last words were, “Tell her that I love her…”

He died.

Atton sobbed and picked up Bau-Dor and contacted the Exile on the comlink.

“He-he’s-he’s dead…”


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8 Responses to “Saved, Crushed, Dead”

  1. Darth Shiin says:

    Wow!!! I love it!!!!

    Hehehehehehehe, loving your own stories is so weird

  2. Darth_Cyvan says:

    holy crap! that was awesome

  3. Nihilus says:

    Hahaha mass comment, my ass!
    I don’t post more than an average of 3 comments on anyone’s story.
    Besides the good laugh, it was a pretty good story. I wouldn’t imagine Mira being all…intrusive like that.

  4. MaggOnasi says:

    He gave her the, WHAT–THE–HELL??? Type of look.
    Oh, and I agree with Darth_Cyvan!
    BTW, I only saw you mass commenting Nihilus’s stories…

  5. wholy hell! that was an awesome story there!
    uh, has the Exile and Brianna ever heard of closing and locking doors before?
    *sniffs* wahhhh! poor Bao-Dur’s dead! nooo! i kinda liked him…
    so sad… so sad…

  6. Darth Shiin says:

    RevanBodygaurd: the door was locked but then Mira knocked.

    MaggOnasi (That includes everyone else): The whole, MassCommentate thing was a joke, sheesh.

  7. Nihilus says:

    That’s why I said “good laugh”.

  8. Darth Shiin says:

    I know, I’m not talking about YOU, I mean RevanBodygaurd and MaggOnasi, they don’t know…

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