Shatterd Hearts Chapter 1
Notes: I read Precious Memories, a series created by my half-sister and I bairly believed it. Not being rude or anything, but I wanted to write about how I think Mical and the Exile knew eachother. Since my first Exile was Jessica, that’s going to be the main character, and yes, its supose to be short!
Shatterd Hearts…
Part 1
“No, no Mical! Your doing it wrong!”
“I’m sorry Master, but I need a break from all this jedi training.”
“Fine. But don’t be gone long.”
Mical sped out of the training room and down the academy halls.
“Wow, Mical. Where are you going in such a hurry?” Jessica asked stopping him.
“Anywhere other than here! I’ve had it with Atris and her stupid training!”
“Harsh words, Mical can lead to…”
“The darkside, so I’ve been told, now please shoot me.”
“Don’t be so negative, Mical. It might be the most dumbast thing, but in time, it will all pay off. I promise.”
“Easy for you to say. Your a padawan. Better than initiate.”
“So what? I’m a step ahead of you.”
“So what? I’ve been here longer than you.”
“A month. Wow, somebody please end this non achieving life.”
“I’m serious! Heck, next thing you know, Master Vrook is going to walk up to you a promote you to Jedi Knight.”
Master Vrook, one of the council members walked up to Jessica and Mical.
“Mical. Atris wants to promote you to Padawan.”
“Really?”
“Yes. Good job, Mical, and good luck. Good luck in your training’s too, Jessica. May the force be with you.”
Vrook bowed down before leaving.
“Did you hear that?”
“Hear what?”
“I’ve been promoted to Padawan!”
“I was standing right here.”
“Oh yea.”
“You better get back before Atris gets mad.”
“Good idea Jessie. Wanna duel when I’m done?”
“Sure.”
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December 27th, 2007 at 10:11 pm
you know i always imagined the Disciple being all innocent and goodie good boy. i thought he would be calm and patient. it looks like you found a gap in my series and filled it in for me! i think you did a pretty good job!
in my series, Mical didn’t have a Master and wanted the Exile for his Master (he didn’t listen to Exile to accept the Masters’ offer, so he’s bad that way), second Artis cares for the Exile when her Master died in a bar fight, didn’t feel it was time to have a apprentice but wanted Exile, and assigned Exile to help her in the library
so are you going to complete the many plot holes i left out in my series then? was ‘Precious Memories’ a disappointment?
December 27th, 2007 at 10:37 pm
Umm no, Precious Memories wasn’t a disappointment, I just didn’t think it was true! Like, I didn’t think the story was like that
December 27th, 2007 at 10:49 pm
well, i’m not too fond of the Disciple so no offense taken…
so you put in all the emotional, sappy romance stuff if you want
man, i should’ve done a better job in Precious Memories
why is it called Shattered Hearts?
Carth or Disciple= Disciple (liked him more than Carth)
Disciple or Atton= ATTON! OF COURSE! (my thoughts)
December 28th, 2007 at 9:12 am
WHAT?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?! You like Disciple better than my smexy Carth (no offence Scott)????? How dare you! Pshhh, and your my half-sister…
jk
But I still can’t believe you like Mical better than Carth =P
December 29th, 2007 at 11:01 am
OK, you’ll think I’m so dumb, but is Carth in KotOR I? I haven’t played it yet . . .
December 29th, 2007 at 12:34 pm
Hehehe, yeah, Carth is one of the main characters
December 29th, 2007 at 12:39 pm
yep, Mical over Carth. Mical’s cute in a adorable stalker way, sorry
but he’s not as hot as Atton!
i know i’m soooo weird!
enough said
December 29th, 2007 at 3:38 pm
Mical isn’t a stalker, Atton is a bi, pervey, stalker
December 29th, 2007 at 5:56 pm
says you…
you just don’t know Mical has a dark side; everyone has a dark side
a lesson in life to learn, sis
December 29th, 2007 at 10:06 pm
Um, I forgot… Who’s Mical? And Pheeramae, HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!! Kotor 1 is AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You should play it before you come onto this site!! I’m falling off the chair!!! Oh-Em-Gee!!!!!!!!! Sorry, that was rude. But PLAY KOTOR 1!
December 29th, 2007 at 10:09 pm
No offence Pheeramae, all stories here give away the coolest secret! Oh well, I think its time we tell him Darth Shiin…
I know, RevanBodyguard, I have a darkside… I stole a kiss (those little candies)… I know… I should be punished… No, I don’t really have a darkside other than punching my best friend (I don’t regret it =P)
January 10th, 2008 at 9:21 pm
No offence taken. (It really takes quite a bit to offend me. =) )I haven’t played KotOR I yet bcause i can’t find it anywhere! >( I really wantto though, just so you know. Y’all like Atton? I’m sorry, that’s just . . . strange. I like Mical better ONLY because he’s much more clean-mouthed than Atton. Now, perfection would be someone with Mical’s manners, looks and spirit and Atton’s wit, humor and bravery. But that’e just me. I’m crazy. Ask anyone. This next part is EXREMELY off subject so . . . (Ever seen the movie Phantom of the Opera? I would’ve married Erik (the Phatnom). Not Raoul! Yuck!)
January 15th, 2008 at 10:02 am
You should get Kotor 1 online
January 15th, 2008 at 12:32 pm
No, thanks. I’d rather get it for xBox.