http://www.old-republic.com/fanfiction/fanfiction/starwars/duel-on-the-ravager-2 Fan fiction from the Star Wars Knights of the Old Republic video games Series, Star War: The Old Republic multiplayer online video game, and the entire Star Wars movies and expanded universe. Mon, 28 Mar 2011 05:00:44 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.8.1 http://www.old-republic.com/fanfiction/fanfiction/starwars/duel-on-the-ravager-2/comment-page-1#comment-1543 Sat, 17 Apr 2010 20:38:19 +0000 http://www.old-republic.com/fanfiction/starwars/duel-on-the-ravager-2#comment-1543 Ah, thank you for the advice.

]]> http://www.old-republic.com/fanfiction/fanfiction/starwars/duel-on-the-ravager-2/comment-page-1#comment-1542 Thu, 15 Apr 2010 22:59:43 +0000 http://www.old-republic.com/fanfiction/starwars/duel-on-the-ravager-2#comment-1542 It isn’t a bad plot, I enjoy the idea; but there is one thing that screams out to me here: it’s not developed. I don’t know if you intend to rewrite it, but the onslaught of simple sentences and the overuse of boring verbs coupled with the lack of paragraph structure makes reading this excerpt unappealing. I’m not certain how old you are, but it may be a decent idea to bring this to your English and ask them to go over how to write more maturely. Keep it up!=D

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